Contrary to popular opinion, romance writers care a great deal about the language they use in a book. Language choice in romance novels is important because the words used need to tell a great story in a way that doesn’t serve as a stumbling block for a reader who’s deeply involved. Nowhere is this dichotomy between good storytelling and language choice more evident than in books that are written in the kind of first person that alternates between male and female point-of-view. Authors who choose to write this way need to pay close attention to the language they use to portray each character’s inner thoughts. Bittersweet by Sarina Bowen is a wonderful example of how an author does this well.
“I’d never made love to anyone. Great sex was something I’d experienced many times. But as I methodically kissed away every one of Audrey’s defenses, it occurred to me that this was the first time I’d ever tried to show someone how I really felt about her.”